Tuesday, December 8, 2009

Teaser Tuesday from Don't Hate the Player

Okay dudes, here's my opening from DHtP. Because of that fact, I'll be snipping ASAP on the stroke of Midnight...well, probably a little earlier! But here it goes!!

19 comments:

Lee Bross said...

I cannot wait for this to sell so I can read the entire thing. I love all the little glimpses you've shared!!

houndrat said...

Love this--your descriptions are so fun, as usual. Plus--great backstory--duck-taped to a chair? BWAHAHA! It's even better bc I know what the call is about--poor Jake!

Cannot WAIT to read this--do I get an ARC(wink, wink)??? ;)

VĂ©ro said...

Wow I'm hooked! I can't wait to be able to read more.

LizPage said...

Omg I laughed out loud the ENTIRE time. This is so high school. So, I could die I'm so bored, there's a million places I'd rather be, let me count the awful things I would rather be doing than this.
This paragraph is pure awesomeness and put a huge smile on my face.

Where the hell is Jake? I wondered. Jake Slater was the biggest douchebag I’ve ever known. He was the prankster who always gave Freshman swirlies in the toilets or shanked them, leaving them bare-assed and humiliated in front of the entire school. He was the illiterate jock who always wanted to copy off your homework or cheat off your test. He was the idiot who could never hold his alcohol and always ended up puking in the back seat of your car before slurring an “I looove you, man!” Yeah, he was all those things and more.

He was my best friend.

Amna said...

Loved the voice!
This MC!
This story!

Great teaser

Becca said...

Dude, this makes me want to read it again. :D I miss Noah! lol <33

Deniz Kuypers said...

Great job at creating a funny and characteristic voice for your MC!

Karla Calalang said...

I want to read this so bad! I love it! Thanks for giving us a glimpse!

Hannah said...

I'm with Becca. Want more Noah! :D

La-La-La-Laurie said...

Ah, I love this! So much good, down home stuff.

I lost a friend in high school and that ending really hits so close to home. Everything can change in that one second. Heartbreaking.

Mortem Twins said...

I love this! You definitely did a good job making the Noah sound like a high school kid! Can't wait!!!

Emilia Joyce Plater said...

OMG. I cannot get over this teaser. The voice is so incredible - you have teenage boy DOWN. "Everyone else in the classroom looked stoned or spaced out." - I laughed out loud. I know you're a teacher and everything, but I was a still a tiny little bit surprised at how accurate this all sounded. You are a genius. :D

Raven said...

LOL! Wow, this was amazing! It was funny and I can already tell that I'm going to love Noah. The voice is just so believable and I really can't wait for this to sell so I can finish reading!

Great snip ^_^

Paranormalchick said...

OMG Noah where have you been?? I've missed you!! LOL

I Love Love Love the few paragraphs you tacked onto the intro, nice touch with the desk and gum stuff!!

I still heart Noah :) He's one of my fav's

inkspatters said...

This is just too funny and too awesome. Loved the "He was my best friend line" after the description of Jake :D

Kaitlin Ward said...

Good luck on sub!!
LOVE the duct tape story. It really will fix anything ;)

Bee said...

The voice is AWESOME..it's so natural!!

Linda said...

Ooh this was really good. Awesome voice. I can't wait to read more!

Amanda said...

You used great imagery and I really want to know what trouble Jake got himself into. Nice teaser!